You can do a better job in writing. Remember to organize your text: include an introduction at the beginning and a conclusion at the end. Also, be careful with your spelling, grammar and punctuation; you probably make a lot of mistakes in these aspects of writing. Push yourself: try to use the idiomatic future (be going to) more times in your text.You did a good job but you can do better. Remember to connect the ideas in your text using words such as “and”, “but”, “in addition”, etc. There are some mistakes in spelling, grammar and punctuation; be careful with those! Finally, try to push yourself harder: use the idiomatic future (be going to) to express plans more frequently in your text. You did a great job! Your text is well-organized and there is cohesion in your ideas. You made virtually no mistakes in grammar, spelling, and punctuation. You did a great job using the idiomatic future (be going to) in your text. Congratulations!